Feedback Unit 2
Hello Heaven!
I enjoyed you and Kaela’s section for this week. I liked that you were able to present the connections of development between boys and girls with statistical research and current events. I would suggest to maybe try an expand your thoughts a little more towards just the impact towards females. Or maybe find a statistic that only females faced. Just to make the women stand out over the men aspect a little more. You were able to provide strong information but I believe that you just scratched the surface. The research your provided, I believe, allows your reader of the progress change and what parents or adults might be seeing within the changes of their youth. I also liked that at the end of the first section, psychological, you ended with a positive correlation towards ways to show growth and improvement which. As the health care provider, I feel sections and comments like that help to transition the research into clinical application. In the section second section, social and emotional, you refer the reader to “see image below.” As an outside reader, these directions can be misleading as to which picture you are asking them to look at this time. I would suggest placing this comment in parenthesis. In addition, I would suggest that adding figure numbers to each image and link would be helpful to readers. For the implication section, I really enjoyed the modern-day reference to current events that Princess Kate is taking on. For the healthcare provider, this link can be used as an additional teaching tool to parents, guardians, and youth. Overall great work and I look forward to seeing your site section progress!
Cheers,
Brittany Fredrick
I enjoyed you and Kaela’s section for this week. I liked that you were able to present the connections of development between boys and girls with statistical research and current events. I would suggest to maybe try an expand your thoughts a little more towards just the impact towards females. Or maybe find a statistic that only females faced. Just to make the women stand out over the men aspect a little more. You were able to provide strong information but I believe that you just scratched the surface. The research your provided, I believe, allows your reader of the progress change and what parents or adults might be seeing within the changes of their youth. I also liked that at the end of the first section, psychological, you ended with a positive correlation towards ways to show growth and improvement which. As the health care provider, I feel sections and comments like that help to transition the research into clinical application. In the section second section, social and emotional, you refer the reader to “see image below.” As an outside reader, these directions can be misleading as to which picture you are asking them to look at this time. I would suggest placing this comment in parenthesis. In addition, I would suggest that adding figure numbers to each image and link would be helpful to readers. For the implication section, I really enjoyed the modern-day reference to current events that Princess Kate is taking on. For the healthcare provider, this link can be used as an additional teaching tool to parents, guardians, and youth. Overall great work and I look forward to seeing your site section progress!
Cheers,
Brittany Fredrick
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